Today we play our first draft of our trailer 'Wonderland', here are some comments my peers and teachers have given us to improve our trailer.
· -Focus more on the opening shot. A longer look at him walking down the graveyard, along with voice over of what’s happened.
· -Make it clear she died in the car crash. Show him having a negative response and becoming suicidal.
· -More clear on story line, with regards to drugs.
· -Mugging scene needs a POV shot.
· -Needs more emotional factors. For example Rob over the phone when she’s hit by car.
· -Re-arrange the two forest clips. Make it clear he woke up there.
· -Need to make it clear wills meets the drug dealer.
· -Change the music so it’s not continuously play.
Our first draft was 1 minute 34 seconds and so needs further clips to push it up to the 2 minutes and beyond stage. We do have clips still to add and we hope along with the improvements mentioned, our trailer ‘Wonderland’ can achieve the top possible grade.
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