Monthly Diary 21/12/2011

The past month has being a hectic one for us. We have received a lot of feedback for our trailer so have had to change it constantly to try and help us achieve the best possible grade. We aim for our trailer to receive an A-Grade so we're always looking for feedback from our teacher and peers who have all seen the transformation from just an idea to a reality.

Within this month, it has seen us create two attempts of our trailer (Currently Producing the 3rd) allowing a lot of feedback and ideas to how to improve. We also finished filming 1 or 2 clips at the beginning of the month, with the last 2 weeks mainly being used to formulate a sequence for the trailer.

At this moment in time were editing a 3rd attempt with the feedback we got from the second resulting in us having to change the whole sequence. We hope for this edit to be done in the next week and up on the blog, hoping for more feedback to come from this.

Wonderland 2nd Draft

Here is our 2nd attempt for our trailer 'Wonderland'. Like the first attempt we showed it to our peers and teacher, who again helped us with some feedback.

From showing our first attempt to our teacher, we gained some feedback to help us improve and in turn created this attempt. Like every media outlet feedback is always needed, and our second attempt reached a lot of new feedback.

Here is what our teachers and peers thought for improvements;

-Make a Black and white contrast of some clips to differentiate between the 'present' and the 'past'.

- Take out the clips that saw the main characters on the bench.

-Change the sequence of the trailer to make the audience understand the storyline better.

-Add more 'drug taking' scenes.

-Add another voice over.

-Make him walk slower when walking through the graveyard. Show it's a graveyard.

-More scenes of the two main characters interacting in the 'wonderland' state.

This shows to be a lot of work and a small bit of filming needing to be added. With that in mind, we hope to get it done as quick as possible achieving the best grad when moving onto the next stage of the project.

Wonderland 1st Draft

Today we play our first draft of our trailer 'Wonderland', here are some comments my peers and teachers have given us to improve our trailer.

·         -Focus more on the opening shot. A longer look at him walking down the graveyard, along with voice over of what’s happened.

·         -Make it clear she died in the car crash. Show him having a negative response and becoming suicidal.

·         -More clear on story line, with regards to drugs.

·         -Mugging scene needs a POV shot.

·         -Needs more emotional factors. For example Rob over the phone when she’s hit by car.

·         -Re-arrange the two forest clips. Make it clear he woke up there.

·         -Need to make it clear wills meets the drug dealer.

·         -Change the music so it’s not continuously play.

Our first draft was 1 minute 34 seconds and so needs further clips to push it up to the 2 minutes and beyond stage. We do have clips still to add and we hope along with the improvements mentioned, our trailer ‘Wonderland’ can achieve the top possible grade.